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Man, I am officially not fond of the Villanelle poetry form XD;. I've been slaving away for the past, umm... I dunno, it's been quite awhile since I've started my attempt ^^;. All I have to say after working so hard is... blarg. Blarg! at the results I came up with, and also my brain is now officially blarg'y after all that XD;. Oh well, I'm sticking it in my poetry portfolio for creative writing anyway! Bwahahaha ^_^.

THE MEETING
by (omg) M

I was waiting in the water for you.
‘Where the ocean meets the sand,’ you promised.
So long I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.

When you said this, I knew exactly where
you meant. The place where we began this tryst.
I was waiting in the water for you.

Before the sun even set, I was there.
I sat on the sand, heady from ocean mist.
So long I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.

As the sun vanished, at the shore I’d stare.
As always, I was soothed as the waves hissed.
I was waiting in the water for you.

You would come. You called me. You wouldn’t dare
to wound my heart like this. I clenched my fist.
So long I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.

You never came. Will your heart rip and tear?
because now, in these ocean waves I twist.
I was waiting in the water for you.
So long. I’ve waited, now my lips are blue.




For anyone else who doesn't know what the heck a villanelle is (I didn't until today XD; ), you probably noticed that two lines repeated A LOT. They're supposed to-- I'm not just being stupid ^^;. Those two lines rhyme... and then some other lines rhyme... and yeah, my brain was about burst into flame while attempting to make the form correct XD;. I think I managed to do it, though. I know my poem's crap, shut up XD;;;. Here's the proper rhyme scheme, if anyone's interested:

A
b
A’

a
b
A

a
b
A’

a
b
A

a
b
A’

a
b
A
A’

Let's start a villanelle revolution!

Actually... for fuck's sake,
let's just please not ever
speak of poetry again. My
sanity is waning, as anyone
around me has noticed with
my constant babbling of
slander against poetry XD;;.

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moeruze_burning
Oct. 14th, 2006 01:53 am (UTC)
=D That gave me beautiful images in my head, even though it's not a cheery poem. XD Great job! I would never have the brain power to write a villianelle poem. XD *applauds you*
snowym
Oct. 16th, 2006 12:58 am (UTC)
Hooray! At least it seemed okay to someone XD;. I'm turning it in regardless, dammit. I have no other choice, unless I want a lovely incomplete assignment ^^;.
moeruze_burning
Oct. 16th, 2006 01:06 am (UTC)
8DD If your teacher doesn't like it, he/she's a cranky old miser.
disutansu
Oct. 14th, 2006 03:15 am (UTC)
OMG M-SAMA WE FINISHED OUR LAST PIECE OF POETRY LIKE YESTERDAY SO WE'RE MOVING ONTO........... PLAYS. Finally. No more confusing poems wtf. XD;; *loves*

I actually liked yours though. o.o *worships*
snowym
Oct. 16th, 2006 12:59 am (UTC)
I would so rather study poetry than plays XDDD;. How's that going for you?

Sankyu XD.
disutansu
Oct. 16th, 2006 02:54 am (UTC)
Oh yeah I still have to read it for Tuesday... *will do so tomorrow* XD;;
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